Feedback on our first draft.

This is our first draft of our opening sequence and the feedback, from our class mates.

      Here are some key words that people used when asked the question 'Think about the sound and the images- are they appropriate? Do they go together?' 

People were also asked about the camera, attention to framing, variety of shot distance and angle? Close attention use ofmise en scene? Below are some comments we received on this question:

-"Good angle of camera shots however could have more variety"

-"Good variety of shots, the long distance shot was done really well"

-Good camera shots, you used a wide variety"

-"The pan shots were a bit shaky and unstable"

-"There was not a large variety of shots"

-"I like the shots walking into the house"

-"Good camera angles, great mise en scene"

-"The foot shot of the group feet before the woman appears is confusing"

- "Party shot is confusing, you could have shown the 'birthday party' on the board to make it more obvious"

- "The shots are good but you could have made it clearer that there was a party by filming the '17th birthday' part of the map"

Now we have the feedback we are planning on re-editing our opening sequence to make it more suitable to the target market and as good as it can be.